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  1. mcfeats says:

    Ideas: Add the SG1, in need of repair, difficult to move. Its relocation and repair become a herculean testament to its symbolic importance. Along with it, he finds paper. Under the paper, he finds a manuscript. The ms. is a creative journal from a woman. He repairs the machine. He begins to write back, Questions: end here or end with his return to the blue house, When he approaches, he finds a woman reclined in the hammock. Story ends.

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  2. mcfeats says:

    The typewriter is in need of a paper guide. He adapts a license plate.

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  3. Richard P says:

    Very evocative and appealing.

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    1. mcfeats says:

      Thanks, Richard! I thought I’d aim for a story that doesn’t get too specific on a timeline. I didn’t expect to write in first person, but it felt right,

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  4. I love the repetition. This is a beautiful piece. You can really feel the character’s monotony through the everyday.

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    1. mcfeats says:

      Thank you! I’ll have to figure out how to pace the rest of it

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